Although I was pretty proud of my community paper, it could use some revising. I got carried away with the word “conjoin”, trying too hard to be clever at keeping my introduction useful. The assignment was to answer the question: What is the function of communities in our lives? Secondly, the paper needed to explain the costs and benefits, positive and negative influences, if they foster conformity, if our self-interest is connected to the interests of others and if there is a sacrifice of an inner-life or self-identity in the need to belong. I believe I did address all of this, however, I failed to avoid the “you talk” and headed off target in a few places. I have revised the paper and I believe it is now strong and on target.
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